ตัวอย่างการตรวจ English Proofreading (Sample#12)Ho

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As the result, it might be able to say that because of the international system, which is in hierarchy order, it becomes more difficult for some Southeast Asian countries to be developed in the same level as Northeast.

The global economic system is a hierarchy; some Southeast Asian countries encounter difficulties and cannot develop at the same level as their Northeast counterparts.

Because: ‘As the result it might be able to say that…’ is verbiage and merely increases the word count with no added information. Use of a semicolon as a connector simplifies the construction of the sentence.